I’m not so strong, but (I’m) in good health.
Having been in hospital for six months, now she looks very weak.6.教育状况（Education）I started school in 1984 and left school 12 years later.
I went to study in Beijing University in 1984 and 4 years later I graduated (from that university).
We learned many courses, including…I’ve been studying in Tianshan Primary School (No.1 High School, Fudan University) for more than two years and will graduate next semester.
I got my bachelor’s (master’s, doctor’s) degree in mathematics in April 1998...7.特长爱好（Specialty & Hobbies）
I’m good at spoken English and even better at using computers.
I won the first prize in the English speech contest at school last year.
He got the first place in the homepage designing contest.
My favorite sport is swimming and playing table-tennis.
In my spare time, I like reading and enjoying traveling. 8. 详细特色（Something in detail）
举例法（Giving examples）:
–He was strict with everybody and in everything he did. One day, we were having classes when…–He was very forgetful. Once he came across an old friend of his in the street and ...
–He had a strange way of making his classes lively and interesting. I still remember my first day as a chemistry student.
写作练习
李涛是我校年轻的老教师。他被看作是老教师，是因为他教化学课已经有20年了。说他年轻，因为他今年还不过38岁。 他长得较瘦。头上头发不多，灰白了。他戴着深度眼镜，牙齿又缺了2颗。所以他看上去比他实际年龄要大。他说，在公共汽车上常常有人给他让座。事实上。我曾看见他不止一次地给怀抱婴儿的妇女让过座。只要听一听他的化学课——那课又生动又有趣，你就会发现他真正的年龄。

习作点评
Li Tao is a young but “old” teacher in our school. He is often regarded as an old teacher because he has taught chemistry for over 20 years. He is a thin man with thick glasses. The little grey hair and lacking of two teeth make him look older than his real age.
He often says that there are many people giving their seats to him in buses. But in fact, I saw him giving his seat to the woman who takes her baby in her arms more than once. If you have his lively and interesting chemistry lessons, you will find that he is no more than 38 years old
本文叙议结合，对原材料调控有度，取舍得当，是一篇很好的习作。
修改建议：
1.第二段第一句有chinglish之嫌，可改为:…says that many people give their seats to him.
2.who takes改为 who took。
3.最后一句应改为If you have ever had…

参考范文
A teacher
Li Tao is a young and old teacher in our school. He is regarded as being old for he has been teaching here for 20 years. He is seen, at the same time, as being young as he is now but 38 years old. He doesn’t have much hair on the head. And it is nearly all white. Missing two teeth and wearing thick glasses, he looks older than he really is. He says people often offer their seats to him for his old looks. On the contrary, I myself saw him give up his seat to a woman with a baby in her arms. At least twice he did so. When you attend his interesting and lively classes, you will be sure of his real age ---still young.